/Case 004 NHS South 2024 Public Editorial

Plain language,
on a public deadline.

An NHS regional comms unit rewrote three years of public-facing material before the next inspection cycle.

Reading age
Yr 9 → Yr 6
Public reach
4.2M impressions
Patient phone enquiries
−27%
Reuse across trusts
11 of 14
The simplest test: my mother could read the new letter. She still phoned, but only once.
— Dr. Fern Adekoya, Director of Public Health, NHS South
/ 01 · Brief

Three years of letters, leaflets, and a website nobody could read.

NHS South's public-health unit had inherited a content estate written by twelve different authors over three administrations. The plain-English audit gave the existing material a Year 9 reading age. The target was Year 6.

The catch: the inspection cycle gave us fourteen weeks, including the Christmas freeze.

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[ Patient letter — before / after ]
The before letter ran to 1,200 words. The after, 380. Same legal content.
/ 02 · Approach

We hired one editor for the project, not twelve.

The studio embedded a single editor inside NHS South's comms team for the duration. We rewrote the most-trafficked twenty letters first, then expanded the system outward to leaflets, the website, and the recorded phone tree.

We co-wrote the style guide with the clinical-governance lead. It got signed in one meeting because she'd helped write it.

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[ Style guide — pp. 04–05 ]
Co-written with the clinical-governance lead. Signed in one meeting.
/ 03 · Outcome

Patient phone enquiries dropped 27% by month three.

The reading age came down to Year 6. The 4.2M impressions across owned and earned channels mattered less than the 27% drop in patient phone enquiries — the proxy for whether the new letters worked.

Eleven of the fourteen regional NHS trusts have asked to reuse the system. The studio said yes, free, on the condition that nobody adds a slogan.

/Confidentiality — Figures abbreviated or rounded; engagement detail subject to NDA where applicable.

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